Friday, July 16, 2010

FALSE ALARM

FALSE ALARM

This story appeared here June 2010, but has found a new horror home at Trembles. I'm so excited! Editor Gregory Thompson compared "False Alarm" to Stephen King (what a compliment!) and is including this story in the premier issue, January 2011.

31 comments:

Cathy Olliffe said...

Well holy hell, Peg, if that wasn't the scariest thing I've read in like EVER I don't know what is! Truly horrifying - like scary movie scary or Stephen King scary, no, scarier than that - the stuff scary nightmares are made of. Any time you have evil dead children catching on fire, I mean, that's premium high-grade scary. And the "beast" too... that's just a horror movie waiting to happen.
(Yes, I love pissant, too... reminds me of the Waltons)

Michael Solender said...

Very fun..great dialogue and perfect voice, brought me right back to middle school. Nice job Peggy

Karen from Mentor said...

Wow. And they don't even have crossword puzzles to keep them occupied.

Eternal detention. N I C E.

Jen Brubacher said...

This is terrific. Great horror and ugh, what a reveal! Also, what a punishment.

Linda said...

Wow, great stuff here. I could see this unreel like a movie. Poof! Poof! Burn in hell, teach. Let me guess -- detention, pissant, kudos? Peace...

mazzz in Leeds said...

oh, this was cool... and I can't say I feel at all sorry for her :D

Timothy P. Remp said...

Wow. You went totally H-E-L-L bent on this one! I kept waiting for a dream ending or something to tame it in the end and you happily surprised me. I love the demonic children.

-Tim

Jay Thurston said...

Good to see you kept it fun and light hearted this week Peggy. ;-)

Sarcasm aside... wow the horror, the visuals, the character interaction, the entire scene. You had me hooked from start to finish.

Anneke said...

So funny, great, and I'm glad I'm not a teacher. Eternal detention, I love it.

Mike Robertson said...

What they all said above Peggy. And then some. Awesome, potent, smelly, drippy, scary. That little ditty riveted me but good.

Jeez you're good at this stuff. Remind me not to piss you off.

ThomG said...

This has a cool creepiness to it, made even better by great detail and wonderful dialogue. The devil is in the details and this read caused a shiver to run up the length of my spine.
(and glad to have you back on 3WW.)

Dee Martin said...

I work there - I think I know her LOL. I'm CERTAIN I have met those kids! This was horribly fun Peggy!

John Wiswell said...

Is it bad that I wasn't scared, but rather interested? The infernal is neat to me. And it's good to see you back around, Peggy.

Laura Eno said...

Nothing like turning up the heat in eternal detention... Fun and creepy, Peggy!

Gracie said...

Hee, excellent! I think she was my 3rd grade teacher... glad to see she got what she deserved.

Great story, thoroughly loved it. I agree with Cathy, this should be a horror movie.

quin browne said...

Note to self: Do not move to Eldritch Way, no matter how tempting the housing prices.


Note to Peggy: You always make this look way too easy... a fiery little piece, my friend.

Laurita said...

Horrifying! I loved it. And I sure am glad I didn't have that teacher.

Tony Noland said...

The detention that never ends... I remember being in that hell several times.

Good one!

Eric J. Krause said...

That was an excellent horror piece. Great images and a superb ending. Well done!

Mark Kerstetter said...

Well I'll be flame-broiled. I felt like I was in middle school again - it was pure hell.

Tomara Armstrong said...

Crap... that freaks me out.

seriously...
~2

Bukowski's Basement said...

Devlishly awesome, Peg... And you nailed the smell of my grmmar school to a T -- "the usual stench of disinfectant and child sweat and cafeteria permeations."

Great write.

Matt Merritt said...

Awesome and really scary. You brought the action up and kept it there.

Alan W. Davidson said...

Jeez, and I thought that I went to a tough Jr. high school. Top notch horror with just the right sprinkling of humour. Great job, Peggy.

Sam said...

Sounds just like my old school! Ahh, happy memories...not! That was creepy scary.

KjM said...

And I thought some of my own schooldays were hellish. I stand corrected.

This is a terrific (in all its meanings) ride. Miss Palmer must have been really, really bad. Evil even. This one grabbed me by the lapels and didn't let go.

Excellent, excellent work.

Al Bruno III said...

A great story, very vivid and disturbing.

jdanetyler said...

That was fantastic. Well done. Great tension, great horror, great pacing ... GREAT stuff all around. Excellent!

Pamila Payne said...

Love seeing a bad teacher get her due. The image of the little skeletons sitting at their desks with linked hands made me smile.

Lua said...

wow- creepy and I loved it! After reading this, I think I can never ever dream of becoming a teacher! :)

ganymeder said...

Every child knows Middle School is hell... You did a great job of capturing it.