Friday, April 16, 2010

FLYING COLORS

Thank you to everyone who stopped by to read this post.  I reworked it and cut a few words to qualify for Chad Rohrbaker's contest, posted above (April 26th to be exact.  Read it in its now polished version and follow Chad's link to vote for it.

15 comments:

Jon Paul said...
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Jon Paul said...

Wow!--I really liked this story. I thought the concept was engaging, evocative, and it certainly kept me reading.

Thanks for posting it.

Marisa Birns said...

I really loved this story!

Quite creative and compelling.

I once saw a family friend's "black" aura and that person later cheated someone out of money.

Not that I could ever do that again!

Gracie said...

This one had my heart pounding. Too bad those two didn't get together. They would have made a good pair. Ah, well.

Good story.

V.R. Leavitt said...

This was great!! Good pacing and very engaging story. I also like how you worked in the explanation of what the different aura colors mean without bogging down the pace of the story. This could even be expanded into something more I think.

John Wiswell said...

I support all superhero fiction. Very fun, Peggy. I wish my secret power was finding Cinnabons...

Good luck with Shock Totem!

Bukowski's Basement said...

Peggy... Great tale.

You may wanna enter this into the superhero and crime flash fiction contest...

http://rohrbacher.wordpress.com/2010/04/14/free-gischler/

ThomG said...

Another fantastic idea, which you carried through with great pace and description. You are certainly hitting a groove.

One minor thought: The clinking of Cinnebon cuts. Hers would have been plastic and his paper. Maybe "toughed cups in salute" or something.

Eric J. Krause said...

Very cool story. I enjoyed it a bunch.

quin browne said...

Although we discussed this last night, I want to tell you again how I enjoyed the story, the characters and how I drooled at the idea of a Cinnebon.

Cathy Olliffe said...

Peggy... YOU ROCK!
Totally cool story.
Amazing, exciting pace.
Original character... you could do a book with her. A movie! A TV show!
(You're funny... a few words too long for flash... like I ever let that stop me....!)
Way to go!

Cathy Olliffe said...

And, mmmmmm, cinnabon.

Timothy P. Remp said...

Hi Peg,

What a great and original piece. 'a peeping tom reading stranger's soul’ very well coined. I love your work when you including aura and aura readings. I’d like to see more in future stories.

-Tim

逸凡逸凡 said...

知識可以傳授,智慧卻不行。每個人必須成為他自己。......................................................

Dee Martin said...

I can't believe I missed this one. Made me wish I could see auras and keep from stepping into wrong situations! Loved every bit of it!