Wednesday, March 24, 2010

CHARLIE MAKES HIS WAY

I have removed this story as I am trying to sell it to other markets. Thank you to those who read it here, and I will announce soon where it may be found again.

Peggy

30 comments:

Larry said...

Wow that was a really cool read I find it hard to believe I'm the only commenter love your writing I'll be back again and again.not as good as yours but hey I try.


The Old Biddy

Brad said...

As if spiders weren't creepy enough already! I loved it, especially 'spin his own tale'. Once I realized Charlie was a spider, I went back and read that and laughed out loud.

ThomG said...

Brilliant read, Peggy. A demented Charlotte's Web that's just filled with creepy fun.

Laurita said...

This was brilliant! I absolutely loved it. I thought the story was over when Charlie was crushed in the coffin, but it only got better. U R FUD. Hilarious.

Jay Thurston said...

Wow! Such a creative choice for a protagonist, made this piece truly unique!

You really got inside Charlie's head. I agree with Brad, the "weave his own tale" was definitely revisited once I was aware you were writing about a spider.

Fantastic depth in your description. Loved it!

quin browne said...

effing shot coffee out my nose on this one.


wait for it..wait for it...wait for it...






AHAHAHAHAHA!!


you are amazing. what a great concept, what a great hero.. and the spelling thing?


prefection.

Timothy P. Remp said...

I wasn’t snorting coffee out of my nose but I did find your piece very funny and enjoyable.

This is very, very creative. I loved the spelling part the best and how the Zuckermans attempted to kill him.

Wonderful job, my friend.

Bravo.

-Tim

Marisa Birns said...

This was such an enjoyable read! Loved so many lines. "A-Ha and Stil Heer..." made me laugh so much.

Yes, Charlie may not know how to spell but he certainly knows how to make the story a very good one!

Dee Martin said...

buahahaha - loved this. Freaking hilarious!

G.P. Ching said...

Inspired! This story has everything but I think the humor stands out. One of my favorites for sure.

Michael Solender said...

peg. this is wonderfully developed and just pours out over the reader. really really solid.

John Wiswell said...

Yesterday I made the mistake of eating when visiting Mr. Solender's site. Today I made the mistake of eating mid-way through the "blood pool" section here. It's good, but not for the appetite.

That he's called "Charlie" is just classic punstership. You could do no wrong after that.

Weezel said...

Enjoyable read!

mazzz in Leeds said...

I love the double-take you give the reader when s/he realises Charlie is a spider!
The whole thing was very chuckle-inducing

Eric J. Krause said...

Love the callback to Charlotte's Web. Those misspelled webs were great. And as if spiders weren't horrible enough, now we have to watch out for vampire spiders? /shudder

Great story. I loved it!

Laura Eno said...

HaHaHa! Loved it! A vampire spider...wouldn't Charlotte be proud. ;)

John McDonnell said...

Very good read. I guessed what was going to happen to Charlie halfway through, but it was still enjoyable. Actually, I might have ended it before the Zuckermans, hinting at what happened to Charlie. Although the sequence with the Zuckermans is very good. One question: wouldn't Charlie's bite have turned the Z family into vampires?

Christian Bell said...

Well done, Peg! Humorous and just well writtent throughout!

Tony Noland said...

This was great, very funny and demented. U R FUD, indeed!

Al Bruno III said...

Bravo! A wry reference to a children's classic and a classic kind of weird tale.

pegjet said...

Thank you for all the wonderful comments!

I thought about the affect of Charlie's bite, sort of mentally wrestled with it and determined he would take such a meager amount of blood that he wouldn't turn humans into vampires, but maybe over time... thus, the "pale" reference and Charlie considering a new family.

Thank you John, for keeping me on my toes.

Linda said...

Fabulous. Loved the 'sequel' to one of my favorite stories. With that Peggy twist no one else can quite provide. Peace...

Sam said...

That is the coolest thing I've read in ages - a vampire spider - absolutely ace!!!

Andy Sewina said...

Yeah, I like the concept of the vampire spider and you certainly kept me reading to the end, great idea!

ganymeder said...

That was hilarious! Truly inspired.

Cathy Olliffe said...

Peggy, this is the funniest thing EVER. I swear, a vampire spider??? Who thinks of this stuff!!! And he seems like such a cute, affable little dude, you can't help love him and his spell-challenged ways.
Little love bug, that's what he is.

Man Island said...

I loved it. Charlotte's Web is still one of my all time favorite books. I have read it a minimum of 5 times to my kids in recent years and I still bawl during Charlotte's treatise on friend ship ... and of course when during her death scene. Nice to see that Charlotte's son has a little machismo going on. I laughed ... I'm sure E.B. White would too.

Tomara Armstrong said...

I got a good laugh at this. Very creative and fun!
~2

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Lou Freshwater said...

You mastered the POV of a blood-sucking spider and had me believing the whole entire way. Awesome.